I'll just talk about the newest stuff. Add something to the end of that like: per hour" explained Viper nonchalantly(or something like that) Add more to this section. Add the troopers' reactions to being right next to a dwarf spider droid. Describe a dwarf spider droid, its weaponry, height, what it is famous for, etc. Also, the wreckage of the droid wasn't there doesn't make sense. Reword it like: "Decimator looked around for the wreckage of the droid, but it could not be found" Get rid of the "he thought to himself". Change the "some thing" to a laser. Here are a couple of things to change: "The droid had not been destroyed" makes more sense. "nearly indestructible against normal infantry" "But neither he nor his squadmates were normal infantry" This is the part where you as the author have to make a decision. Do you want your readers to know that Demo is alive? Or do you want it to be a surprise? Personally, I would have it be a surprise. Something like this: Viper looked at his radar and saw that something was still coming at him at over three hundred miles per hour. All of a sudden, he saw a maintenance droid come launching at him, and drew his gun in a futile attempt to destroy it. Suddenly, the droid blew up in a firey explosion. 'Well....that was nice.' thought Viper. "I still got your back" said Demo as he lept down from a hole he had made in the ceiling. “Do you ever do anything the easy way?” Asked Viper “And risk disappointing you” replied Demo. “Come on” said Steel. If you want to add the "still got your back thing", the last line that Demo should say to Viper before he "disappears" should be "I got your back, Viper"