Re: Star Wars Knights of the Old Republic III Fan-Fic by Logan Felipe

[Logan Felipe]

The plot should focus on the "great war" Kreia/Traya mentioned in her visions of the future at the end of KOTOR II.

Revan and the Exile should be party members at some point in the game.

Canonically, Revan will be male and the Exile female.

voice for Revan should be the same as in KOTOR (If your character is male, he has a standard male voice for when he attempts tasks like slicing doors and planting mines. Sort of what JA did with Jaden's voice)

 

My idea (some specifics):

 

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Intro cutscene start

3 Sith Cruisers approach the planet Arborfrost. 2 of them split formation to secure other areas of the planet. One keeps its course straight ahead, deploying stih fighters and freighters. The fighters begin escorting the freighters to the planet’s surface.

(Screen wipe to Jedi Academy on the planet)

The camera rotates a few degrees around the academy. Trees resembling enormous white birches with Dark Brown Stripes can be seen in scattered clusters around the academy, and a large forest of the trees can be seen in the distance. The sounds of birds can be heard.

Camera fades out.

End intro cutscene

 

Load Academy map

You start out in a Jedi Academy. You are the 18 year old padawan of a left-handed Jedi weaponmaster/historian by the name of Vandros Artenon. Your quarters contain a workbench, a large window, a bed, and a Large locker (containing some credits, your lightsabre, 2 medpacs your padawan robes, a comlink, and perhaps some miniquest related items). You go through a quick beginner's tutorial. Instructions are given by Vandros via comlink. He tells you to meet him in a training room of the academy once you've learned all the functions of the game. You have a full map of the academy. On the way to meet Vandros, you have some mandatory discussions with other students. These discussions should serve to determine certain outcomes of historical events; there are no "wrong" answers to these questions, it'd be sort of like the Atton discussions from KOTOR II.

 

When you  reach the meeting, Vandros (who's in his early forties, with dark brown hair and brown eyes) is waiting for you with his sister, Valdras (a few years older than Vandros, same color hair and eyes), and her apprentice (opposite gender of yourself). The apprentice is the same age as your self give or take a few months. You are to have a practice duel with the apprentice. Halfway through the battle, your opponent manages to knock your sabre (the color of which is determined by your jedi class) out of your hand.

 

You now have two choices:

L. forfeit the duel.

D. get angry with your opponent and continue attacking, this time turning up the power of the lightsabre from practice mode to full power, which can kill an opponent.

 

If you choose L, you are praised by Vandros for not giving in to your anger. The other apprentice admires your self control. you both receive light side points (up from grey).

If you choose D, you wound the other apprentice, and Vandros and Valdras knock the two of you away from each other with force push. Your lightsabre is taken away by Vandros, who is disappointed with your actions. The other apprentice develops a grudge towards you. you both receive dark side points (down from grey).

 

Suddenly, the roof of the large, circular chamber collapses in a fiery explosion. the debris separates you and the apprentice from the others. Vandros reaches you via comlink and asks if you're allright. He tells you that you have to reach the Main docking bay, and escape using one of the academy's shuttles (the same type of shuttle seen on Telos in KOTOR II).

 

If you chose L, you have two choices:

L1. Help the other Apprentice escape to the Main Docking Bay.

D1. Tell the other Apprentice to find his/her own way out.

 

If you chose D, you have two choices:

L2. Help the wounded Apprentice escape to the Main Docking Bay.

D2. Tell the wounded Apprentice to find his/her own way out, leaving him/her to die with his/her injuries.

 

L1 and L2 grant lightside points to both you and the apprentice.

D1 and D2 grant Darkside points to both you and the apprentice.

 

You head for the Main Docking Bay to rondevouz with Valdras and Vandros.

start cutscene

A cutscene plays involving some dark Jedi leading Sith troopers into the academy through the breached wall of the training room. Commanding them is Darth Daevok, who is conveying orders from his master, the Sith Lord (a surviving member of the Sith species) who has orchestrated the Mandolorian Wars and the Jedi Civil War from behind the scenes. He and his apprentice have at last emerged from the shadows. The sith forces spread throughout the academy, killing countless padawans as they search for Valdras and Vandros.

end cutscene

 

You find a footlocker containing two training vibroswords, 1 computer spike, 1 security spike, 5 antidotes, and 5 medpacks. There is also a stealth belt (collecting the contents of the footlocker initiates the stealth tutorial). You encounter a computer terminal and a locked door. the appropriate tutorials are available on the terminal. You can either unlock the door via the terminal, or by using security on the door. when you reach the Main Docking Bay, you are met by a dark jedi apprentice armed with a standard red lightsabre with a squad of 4 sith troopers armed with various blasters. They are guarding the Main Docking Bay. The dark Jedi is pleased by the opportunity to fight you, as you are an apprentice; you will be much more of a challenge than the padawans he's already killed (If you chose L1 or L2, the other apprentice will assist you as a party member. If you chose D1 or D2, you will fight them alone, and there will be only two sith troopers accompanying the Dark Jedi).

 

start cutscene

Once you defeat the Dark Jedi, a squad of 6 HK-50 droids advance towards you. You are outnumbered, and Vandros and Valdras are nowhere in sight. You have no hope of defeating them. Suddenly, a very familiar freighter swoops down to the landing platform, it's laser turret blasting the squad of droids to scrap metal. The Ebon Hawk lands, dropping its boarding ramp.

end cutscene

 

Bao-Dur runs out to you and tells you to get onboard before more sith show up. You say something like "What about the other Jedi?"

His response will vary:

If you chose D1, Bao Dur wil tell you that your one of the only jedi left, and that they have the other survivor, Valdras' apprentice, whom they found at the secondary landing platform, on board. If you chose D2, he'll also say that she/he's receiving limited medical attention on board.

If you chose L1, he will tell you and Valdras' apprentice that you are the only surviving jedi in the temple. If you chose L2, he’ll also notice that Valdras’ apprentice is wounded, and tell him/her that the crew can supply him/her medical attention onboard.

 

Start cutscene

The Ebon Hawk lifts off from the landing pad and heads for open space. Smoke billows from the ruins of the jedi academy, and landed sith ships are visible.

(cut to The Sith Lord’s apprentice; who is still inside the academy)

A Dark Jedi urgently reports to The Sith Lord’s apprentice that a small freighter that was sighted entering the atmosphere during the battle is trying to leave the planet. A 7th HK-50 droid had arrived later than the other six, and had spotted you boarding the craft. After hearing this, the Sith Lord’s apprentice is furious. He force crushes the Dark Jedi, letting the corpse drop to the floor. He immediately orders the orbiting sith fleet to intercept the Ebon Hawk.

End cutscene

 

load Ebon Hawk map

 

start cutscene

(in space) The Ebon Hawk has just left the atmosphere. A sith Cruiser moves in to intercept the freighter, deploying its first wave of sith fighters. The fighters lock s-foils in attack positions and begin to tail the Ebon Hawk.

End cutscene

 

Bao-Dur tells the Exile (who is part of the crew) that they can’t jump to hyperspace because of the sith cruiser. The Exile decides to use the main turret to disable the Sith Cruiser’s scanners so that the Ebon Hawk can make her hyperspace jump. If they don’t, the sith willl be able to track the Ebon Hawk’s hyperspace coordinates to her destination.

 

Load “turret” map

Bao-Dur will fly the Ebon Hawk in a pattern around the cruiser. You are the Exile at the gun turret. Your job is to destroy the scanner system (which is located atop the Command Bridge) as well as any fighters that threaten the Ebon Hawk.

Once you complete this objective, the Ebon Hawk may enter hyperspace.

 

Start cutscene

The scanning center erupts into flame. The contents of the top bridge level are sucked into the vacuum of space. As the Ebon Hawk moves into position to make its hyperspace jump, sith fighters attempt to trail it. Just as the sith fighters are about to close in, the Ebon Hawk’s hyperdrive activates, en route to Ithor.

 

(Cut to the academy ruins landing platform)

Vandros and Valdras Artenon board their Republic starfighters and make their escape, leaving the atmosphere undetected. They plot courses for separate planets until they can safely contact the Republic.

(end of specific idea)

 

 

-create your own lightsabres (just like the last game, except that the parts are much easier to find. Each lightsabre you make should have a casing design that at least a little distinctive, rather than just a smooth cylinder. Just select a casing, which can be bought, found, or salvaged from defeated jedi or sith when constructing a lightsabre)

 

-Travel to planets such as Ithor, Sleheyron, Lok, Coruscant, Telos, Toydaria, Arborfrost and Onderon.

 

-will you and Valdras’ apprentice become friends and save the Republic, or become enemies and drive each other down the path of the dark side?

 

-Destroy the long awaited HK-50 droid factory.

 

-interact with old characters such as Bastila, Carth, Bao-Dur, HK-47, T3-M4, Revan, and the Exile, as well as new characters.

 

-meet new species like Bothans, Feeorians, Verpine, Barabels, Dugs, Gran, Mon Calamari, Chistori, Huk, Kaleesh, Kel Dor, Drall, and Chiss.

 

-Fight the Dark Lord of the Sith who has emerged from the shadows.

 

-Bring the Jedi Civil War to an end.

 

And More!

 

Well, what do you think?

(feedback greatly appreciated. please note that this is still in a WIP brainstorming format rather than a final story format)

 

Thrawn, you mentioned that the highlighted paragraph didn't make sense. I've made a couple edits and added a few details, but can you tell me what you found confusing about it specifically?

(The more feedback I get, the better this story will become. )

[Mikan Cyclone]

Sounds like a game I'd love to play.  =)

[Controller]

this would make an intersting mod for KotoR III

[Mikan Cyclone]

This is if they make Kotor III and allow new models to be put in this time....-.-

[Controller]

well im sure they will make a KotoR III. as for the model problem...you never know

[JediKnightNathan]

They should expand the races that you can be. Not just Human.

[Logan Felipe]

They should expand the races that you can be. Not just Human.

 

True. However, this makes a very difficult situation for programmers; as NPC dialogue would have to be even more vague.

Though with the right storyline, it could work out quite well.

An easier option would be to just add a few party members of different species (and I mean like Selkath or Ithorian, NOT another Wookie)

[Logan Felipe]

*Most Recent Version*

 

Text Crawl

Intro cutscene start

3 Sith Cruisers approach the planet Arborfrost. 2 of them split formation to secure other areas of the planet. One keeps its course straight ahead, deploying stih fighters and freighters. The fighters begin escorting the freighters to the planet’s surface.

(Screen wipe to Jedi Academy on the planet)

The camera rotates a few degrees around the academy. Trees resembling enormous white birches with Dark Brown Stripes can be seen in scattered clusters around the academy, and a large forest of the trees can be seen in the distance. The sounds of birds can be heard.

Camera fades out.

End intro cutscene

 

Load Academy map

You start out in a Jedi Academy. You are the 18 year old padawan of a left-handed Jedi weaponmaster/historian by the name of Vandros Artenon. Your quarters contain a workbench, a large window, a bed, and a Large locker (containing some credits, your lightsabre, 2 medpacs your padawan robes, a comlink, and perhaps some miniquest related items). You go through a quick beginner's tutorial. Instructions are given by Vandros via comlink. He tells you to meet him in a training room of the academy once you've learned all the functions of the game. You have a full map of the academy.

 

(On the way to meet Vandros, you have some mandatory discussions with other students. These discussions should serve to determine certain outcomes of historical events; there are no "wrong" answers to these questions, it'd be sort of like the Atton discussions from KOTOR II.)

 

After leaving your quarters, you eventually come to a corridor.

Blocking the corridor are two young padawans, perhaps around ten or 12 years old (1st one’s a Human and second one’s a Drall), arguing about the history of Revan.

 

1st padawan: “…No, no; that’s not true. Revan returned to the jedi after his capture.

 

2nd padawan: “No, you’re wrong. He returned to the Dark Side and used the Star Forge to continue assaulting the Republic.”

 

1st padawan: “He? What are you talking about? She was a woman”.

 

2nd padawan: “Was not.”

 

1st padawan: “Was too.”

 

You:

a. “Um…sorry to interrupt, but would you please let me through? I don’t want to keep master Vandros waiting.”

OR

b. “I’d hate to break up this immature bickering you two have got going here; but do you mind? I’m going to be late for Master Vandros’ training session.”

 

(They see you, and, knowing that you are Vandros’ apprentice, ask you to help settle the

debate with your knowledge of Revan.)

 

1st padawan: “You must be Vandros’ apprentice. Perhaps you can correct my colleague here? He seems to think that Revan was a man, and didn’t return to the light side of the force.”

 

You:

a. “Well, first off, Revan was a man.”

OR

b. “Well, first off, (1st padawan’s name) is right; Revan was a woman.”

 

2nd padawan: “Then what about Revan’s fate?”

 

You:

a. “Revan returned to the Jedi and rejected the Dark Side.”

OR

b. “Revan betrayed allies and returned to the Dark Side.”

 

(If a.)

2nd padawan: “Ah; must have been thinking of that exile. Can’t seem to remember his name…”

(If b.)

1st padawan: “I see. Perhaps I was thinking of…oh, you know the jedi who went into exile after the Mandolorian War. What was her name again?

 

You:

a. “The exile you’re referring to was a man. He fell to the dark side under Darth Traya’s influence. His name was…*”

OR

b. “The exile you’re referring to was a woman. She fell to the dark side under Darth Traya’s influence. Her name was…*”

OR

c. “The exile you’re referring to was a man. He resisted the Dark Side; despite Darth Traya’s influence. His name was…*”

OR

d. “The exile you’re referring to was a woman. She resisted the dark side; despite Darth Traya’s influence. Her name was…*”

 

*initiate name creation screen after selection. The name entered will be the Exile’s name; though basic-speaking characters will still call him/her “Exile”.

 

1st padawan: “Well that clears up a lot. Thank you. Looks like we need to study a bit more, don’t we, (2nd padawan’s name)?”

 

2nd padawan: “I suppose you’re right, (1st padawan’s name).

 

1st padawan: “Well, good day to you.”

 

2nd padawan: “And may the Force be with you.”

 

(both padawans leave)

 

Next you come upon another student, an older padawan around your age (perhaps 18?) of the Twi-Lek species. The Twi-Lek is working at a datapad. He asks you for assistance. Again, this is mandatory. Since your character is fluent in Huttese as  well as basic, you can understand him, and your name will appear as text in the conversation.

 

Example situation:

Twi-Lek:

 

You: a. “What do you need?”

 

Twi-Lek:

 

You:

a. “Wouldn’t it be easier if I just entered their descriptions into your datapad manually?”

OR

b. “OK; I’ll start with Revan. Revan had two eyes…”

 

(If a.)

Twi-Lek:

(If b.)

Rodian:

 

You: a. (Enter Character creation screen)

 

You enter a screen that resembles the character creation screen. You must choose Revan’s Jedi Class and Portrait. You’ve already chosen Revan’s gender, so Guardian, Sentinel, and Consular will be your three choices.

 

Twi-Lek:

 

You: a. (Enter Character creation screen)

 

Repeat process that you did with Revan.

 

Twi-Lek:

 

You continue to make your way to the training room.

 

When you  reach the meeting, Vandros (who's in his early forties, with dark brown hair and brown eyes) is waiting for you with his sister, Valdras (a few years older than Vandros, same color hair and eyes), and her apprentice (opposite gender of yourself). The apprentice is the same age as your self give or take a few months. You are to have a practice duel with the apprentice. Halfway through the battle, your opponent manages to knock your sabre (the color of which is determined by your jedi class) out of your hand.

 

You now have two choices:

L. forfeit the duel.

D. get angry with your opponent and continue attacking, this time turning up the power of the lightsabre from practice mode to full power, which can kill an opponent.

 

If you choose L, you are praised by Vandros for not giving in to your anger. The other apprentice admires your self control. you both receive light side points (up from grey).

If you choose D, you wound the other apprentice, and Vandros and Valdras knock the two of you away from each other with force push. Your lightsabre is taken away by Vandros, who is disappointed with your actions. The other apprentice develops a grudge towards you. you both receive dark side points (down from grey).

 

Suddenly, the roof of the large, circular chamber collapses in a fiery explosion. the debris separates you and the apprentice from the others. Vandros reaches you via comlink and asks if you're allright. He tells you that you have to reach the Main docking bay, and escape using one of the academy's shuttles (the same type of shuttle seen on Telos in KOTOR II).

 

If you chose L, you have two choices:

L1. Help the other Apprentice escape to the Main Docking Bay.

D1. Tell the other Apprentice to find his/her own way out.

 

If you chose D, you have two choices:

L2. Help the wounded Apprentice escape to the Main Docking Bay.

D2. Tell the wounded Apprentice to find his/her own way out, leaving him/her to die with his/her injuries.

 

L1 and L2 grant lightside points to both you and the apprentice.

D1 and D2 grant Darkside points to both you and the apprentice.

 

You head for the Main Docking Bay to rondevouz with Valdras and Vandros.

start cutscene

A cutscene plays involving some dark Jedi leading Sith troopers into the academy through the breached wall of the training room. Commanding them is Darth Daevok, who is conveying orders from his master, the Sith Lord (a surviving member of the Sith species) who has orchestrated the Mandolorian Wars and the Jedi Civil War from behind the scenes. He and his apprentice have at last emerged from the shadows. The sith forces spread throughout the academy, killing countless padawans as they search for Valdras and Vandros.

end cutscene

 

You find a footlocker containing two training vibroswords, 1 computer spike, 1 security spike, 5 antidotes, and 5 medpacks. There is also a stealth belt (collecting the contents of the footlocker initiates the stealth tutorial). You encounter a computer terminal and a locked door. the appropriate tutorials are available on the terminal. You can either unlock the door via the terminal, or by using security on the door. when you reach the Main Docking Bay, you are met by a dark jedi apprentice armed with a standard red lightsabre with a squad of 4 sith troopers armed with various blasters. They are guarding the Main Docking Bay. The dark Jedi is pleased by the opportunity to fight you, as you are an apprentice; you will be much more of a challenge than the padawans he's already killed (If you chose L1 or L2, the other apprentice will assist you as a party member. If you chose D1 or D2, you will fight them alone, and there will be only two sith troopers accompanying the Dark Jedi).

 

start cutscene

Once you defeat the Dark Jedi, a squad of 6 HK-50 droids advance towards you. You are outnumbered, and Vandros and Valdras are nowhere in sight. You have no hope of defeating them. Suddenly, a very familiar freighter swoops down to the landing platform, it's laser turret blasting the squad of droids to scrap metal. The Ebon Hawk lands, dropping its boarding ramp.

end cutscene

 

Bao-Dur runs out to you and tells you to get onboard before more sith show up. You say something like "What about the other Jedi?"

His response will vary:

If you chose D1, Bao Dur wil tell you that your one of the only jedi left, and that they have the other survivor, Valdras' apprentice, whom they found at the secondary landing platform, on board. If you chose D2, he'll also say that she/he's receiving limited medical attention on board.

If you chose L1, he will tell you and Valdras' apprentice that you are the only surviving jedi in the temple. If you chose L2, he’ll also notice that Valdras’ apprentice is wounded, and tell him/her that the crew can supply him/her medical attention onboard.

 

Start cutscene

The Ebon Hawk lifts off from the landing pad and heads for open space. Smoke billows from the ruins of the jedi academy, and landed sith ships are visible.

(cut to The Sith Lord’s apprentice; who is still inside the academy)

A Dark Jedi urgently reports to The Sith Lord’s apprentice that a small freighter that was sighted entering the atmosphere during the battle is trying to leave the planet. A 7th HK-50 droid had arrived later than the other six, and had spotted you boarding the craft. After hearing this, the Sith Lord’s apprentice is furious. He force crushes the Dark Jedi, letting the corpse drop to the floor. He immediately orders the orbiting sith fleet to intercept the Ebon Hawk.

End cutscene

 

load Ebon Hawk map

 

start cutscene

(in space) The Ebon Hawk has just left the atmosphere. A sith Cruiser moves in to intercept the freighter, deploying its first wave of sith fighters. The fighters lock s-foils in attack positions and begin to tail the Ebon Hawk.

End cutscene

 

Bao-Dur tells the Exile (who is part of the crew) that they can’t jump to hyperspace because of the sith cruiser. The Exile decides to use the main turret to disable the Sith Cruiser’s scanners so that the Ebon Hawk can make her hyperspace jump. If they don’t, the sith willl be able to track the Ebon Hawk’s hyperspace coordinates to her destination.

 

Load “turret” map

Bao-Dur will fly the Ebon Hawk in a pattern around the cruiser. You are the Exile at the gun turret. Your job is to destroy the scanner system (which is located atop the Command Bridge) as well as any fighters that threaten the Ebon Hawk.

Once you complete this objective, the Ebon Hawk may enter hyperspace.

 

Start cutscene

The scanning center erupts into flame. The contents of the top bridge level are sucked into the vacuum of space. As the Ebon Hawk moves into position to make its hyperspace jump, sith fighters attempt to trail it. Just as the sith fighters are about to close in, the Ebon Hawk’s hyperdrive activates, en route to Ithor.

 

(Cut to the academy ruins landing platform)

Vandros and Valdras Artenon board their Republic starfighters and make their escape, leaving the atmosphere undetected. They plot courses for separate planets until they can safely contact the Republic.

(end of specific idea)

 

 

Party members (by the end of the game):

 

1. Carth

2. Bao-Dur

3. Bastila

4. HK-47

5. T3-M4

6. Revan

7. the Exile

8. Valdras' apprentice

9. Akmehdtab Aja-Nak Gíluz (mentioned in description).

10. a Selkath or Dug Jedi

Edited January 27, 2008 by Logan Felipe

[Guest]

Wow, this probably took u a while to come up with, but it is great. I've come up with a few ideas, but nothing this in depth or detailed. Are u sure ur not a game designer...lol.

[Logan Felipe]

Are u sure ur not a game designer...lol.

Yes, unfortunately.

Thanks for the feedback.

 

The key to a good story is a lot of brainstorming. I've been thinking on this idea (as well as several other, later era storylines) on and off for about a year.

 

http://swfanon.wikia.com/wiki/Recinzione

This link describes Vandros and Valdras a bit; though its meant as backstory material, so its not as extensive.

(There are some links there to other fanon Articles I've made as well.)

[Grand Admiral Thrawn 889]

not bad back story.

[Empireftw]

Wow big conflict you are a padawan but you know what revan and the exile look like you must be pretty  bad lol, besides the fact that the jedi probbaly have records of what bolth of them look like.

[Logan Felipe]

Wow big conflict you are a padawan but you know what revan and the exile look like you must be pretty  bad lol, besides the fact that the jedi probbaly have records of what bolth of them look like.

 

Your master is a Jedi Historian; information is important; there's no conflict there.

[Controller]

it could be a simple as the person who's doing the report would go and get the info himself/herself but you have this person walking towards you that already knows because his/her master is a Historian, all the way up to it being a test by your master to see what you would do when asked for help

[Dorkthehunter]

This is a cool fan fic. One of the best I've seen. I am still wondering how a lot of people comment on this story, and no one comments on mine. I guess mine aren't this exciting...I'll work on that.

[Logan Felipe]

Your master is a Jedi Historian; information is important; there's no conflict there.

 

Sorry if the quoted post was confusing; I was in a hurry.

 

Vandros is a Historian. Like Thrawn, he values information, particularly History.

Being his apprentice, history would be high on his curriculum.

 

Remember that in KOTOR I, you were also a relatively new student, and Master Dorak told you quite a lot about Revan and Malak. Vandros just tells you a bit more, having known the Exile and Revan better than other members of the Jedi Council.

 

Nice suggestion AT-AT Controller. I'll see how I can incorporate that idea...

 

Again, thanx for the feedbak; i really helps my writing process.

[Empireftw]

Im mean but realy im going on a search for Revan but omg i dont know what he looks like i n33d you to tell me plz.

 

If that person was on a search for revan the counsil would have informed him or her, now i have an idea that could owrk instead of the mission person walking up to you the padawans will ask what revan looks like, you then will say sure this will port you to your data pad and you will be able to choose aperances and name maybe even class if you wanted.

[Logan Felipe]

If that person was on a search for revan the counsil would have informed him or her, now i have an idea that could owrk instead of the mission person walking up to you the padawans will ask what revan looks like, you then will say sure this will port you to your data pad and you will be able to choose aperances and name maybe even class if you wanted.

 

Thanks, but I prefer the way I set it up so far.

Im mean but realy im going on a search for Revan but omg i dont know what he looks like i n33d you to tell me plz.

He wasn't searching for Revan and the Exile; he wasresearching them.

Maybe this analogy will help; Let's say you're doing a report on the Dali Lama and that you live in California. Are you actually going to go to Asia to find the Dali Lama? No; you're going ask someone else who knows about the Dali Lama, or check online or in a book.

 

The same principle applies, except instead of the Dali Lama the padawan is researching Revan and the Exile.