Character bio/story in the works

[DarthFelth]

this is the board its nearest to being on topic and actually getting some attention, im working on a bio for a sith lord for a star wars turn based game i run called Galactic conquest online which hasnt started yet, anyways this is my main charcters, it isnt finished by far, i know my spelling poor so please to flame me on that. Nnyways this turn based game involves a limited amount of rpg which is more in story form, part for fun but part to help sun up the campaign, how its going in a much more interesting way and help help keep that star wats feel.

 

anyways here we go, any feed back on how its going will be great.

 

Darth Malice, Dark Lord of the Sith

 

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Born Davin Suba on the planet of Nar Shardda into a poor and unnoticed family. He began his live working one of the cantinas, it was here as if by chance that he was discovered and taken to the Jedi Academy in the Yavin system, whether this was by chance or merely fate is anyone guess. At the time Davin was just a young boy cleaning the tables for scum that seem to be drawn to Nar Shadaa like bugs to bright light however on this day if not for a wondering Jedi it could have been Davin last.

 

A drunken Rodian was not happy with Davin service and pulled a pistol out boy taking a shot. It appeared as if by luck that shot missed and screeched past his ear but in truth the boy knew a Jedi trick, he had very weak buy usually ability to see thing just before they happened and this is properly how he managed to survive so long in a place such as this.

 

The Rodian took another shot only to see the boy ducked under a table. As the Bounty hunter took aim again a man appear in front of him. The Rodian looked up and snarled a curse in his native tongue. To his shock his weapon flew out of his hand and straight into the strangers. The man waved his hand and then spoke

“Leaveâ€

Edited March 21, 2005 by DarthFelth

[Lord_La_forge]

Looks quite well made. Of course you'll need a different avatar for that character, but I get the idea anyways

Think Darth Malice is not a quite SW like name, and it's not that scary either. It sounds too much like Alice to me... (How the **** is Alice?)

Davin or Saris are much better.

[DarthFelth]

well i like it and well, until i see a better one im sticking with it hehe, cheers for the reply and i updated it abit, still work in progress

[SOCL]

well i like it and well, until i see a better one im sticking with it hehe, cheers for the reply and i updated it abit, still work in progress

Actually, you may want to follow LaForge's advice and possibly down-size your avatar (it's a little wide).

[Paul]

I don't know SOCL and LaForge I sort of liked the sound of Darth Malice and it didn't make me think of Alice at all. Just my two cents worth. -Grand Moff Conway

[SOCL]

I don't know SOCL

You don't know me? I just thought that his member avatar was a tad wider then normal....

[DarthFelth]

well i like it and well, until i see a better one im sticking with it hehe, cheers for the reply and i updated it abit, still work in progress

Actually, you may want to follow LaForge's advice and possibly down-size your avatar (it's a little wide).

 

he didnt mention size at all, i assumed he meant the picture of anakin ontop of the story as he said character

 

Yeah alice, meh, the meaning of Malice seems to fit the character rather well.

[Lord_La_forge]

Oh, does Malice actually mean anything? Sorry then...

[DarthFelth]

Definition: \Mal"ice\, n. [F. malice, fr. L. malitia, from malus bad,

ill, evil, prob. orig., dirty, black; cf. Gr. ? black, Skr.

mala dirt. Cf. {Mauger}.]

1. Enmity of heart; malevolence; ill will; a spirit

delighting in harm or misfortune to another; a disposition

to injure another; a malignant design of evil. ``Nor set

down aught in malice.'' --Shak.

 

Envy, hatred, and malice are three distinct passions

of the mind. --Ld. Holt.

 

2. (Law) Any wicked or mischievous intention of the mind; a

depraved inclination to mischief; an intention to vex,

annoy, or injure another person, or to do a wrongful act

without just cause or cause or excuse; a wanton disregard

of the rights or safety of others; willfulness.

[Paul]

SOCL, Of course I know you. You misunderstood my statement!

Grand Moff Conway

[DarthFelth]

The reason i used the name was cos of its meaning and after reading a few star wars fan sites and all the idea they had behind the name Malice was what i came up with, The above post explain the meaning was pretty much what made go with (i looked up the word cos i couldnt remember the exact meaning)

 

Cheers to those who have commented on it however it isnt finished i still have to explain though his creation of a army, the chaos that he causes which brings GCO to its current state a few small warlord factions battling for control of the galaxy.

 

Then i have to do Darth Silaguis bio, so far Malices is 5 pages in word and im only going into details on the key events and were it helps show the kinda person he is now.

 

Any input on the your thoughts on how he turned his lover, gaining power of a small pirate fleet (i mean like a few ships to start with)

 

Also clonning machines, any ideas on were he could find one? Ideas on a better method of gaining a army?

 

Cheers

 

*Edit* Avatar better now

[Mad78]

Nice Stuff.

 

Maybe he could find some clonning tubes that Thrawn hid?

[DarthFelth]

ohh, might work, hmm

[SOCL]

SOCL, Of course I know you. You misunderstood my statement!

Grand Moff Conway

I know, heh-heh, I was just playing around.

[DarthFelth]

I using the Wayland for now cos i cant think of a better one, anyone got any better ideas for planet and does anyone know the loction of Zoist?

 

*edit* found Zoist now anyways, meh, right i have it pretty much done now, thouhts on bits i should change?

[Paul]

So far I enjoy the story very much.-Grand Moff Conway

[DarthFelth]

well its more a bio to go my site, the missing info will be Silaguis bio when i start it. I think its pretty much done for the bio. once the other bio is done i can start the main story

[Mad78]

Good luck for the rest of your story

[DarthFelth]

hehe cheers mate