SW vs ST Fan Fiction....

[Cain]

Ahhhh.....sory dude the feedback is coming I just need to find the diskete at work where I put it ...it is very possible that I left it in the PC at work and now I can't find it ...and since you was away I forget ...btw can you make a second effort and send it again on my yahoo email ?

 

 

...about the suggestions well I was only suggesting no offence

 

 

..." dimension splicing " !?! nope I don't think so..... you don't have here a dimension problem..... just a temporal-reality storm

[Stellar_Magic]

Well, dimensions exist for every moment of time due to the multiverse theory of quantum mechanics. Of course my dislike of time story based plots comes down to my favorite line from Star Trek, "I hate Temporal Mechanics."

[Cain]

Found your script I have It was on my desktop

 

 

btw what god allien ?!...I was talking about the iminent crush of two dimenssions (not only galaxies) and the reality storm that preceded that event

 

 

now about the story ...well I recived feedback that some of your characters don't behave in the way that you writte them (Mask on the PTESB 2.4 download) ....you should consider explaining to him some aspects also send him the secret script ......well since you are my favorite forgain writter you should consider explaining to me also why the romulans are fighting the imperials and why he imperials didn't responded initialy to the hail ?!....and how come fighters whitout shields resisted more than 1 minute against the enteprise ?!

 

 

As usual me critics and coments ...non the less I love the story

[Stellar_Magic]

Romulan established policy is that any vessel intruding without authorization in their space is to be destroyed.

 

The Enterprise is the sovereign class ship which features less phaser banks then the Galaxy class but more torpedoes. The Enterprise fires its phasers on the Imp Star and drains the banks which take awhile to recharge and gave the fighters and bombers some room to operate.

 

The thing is there is an intelligence behind all of these events...which is something that will certainly come to the forefront.

 

The Imperials didn't respond to the hail for two reasons, first they were busy fending of the attack, and secondly, their communcations systems are quite different. If you recall in the opening episode Voyager had to break apart and analyse the distress call from the Jade Scimitar before they even could view it.

 

You know mask could comment here so I could read it,

[Cain]

Mask is a super very nice guy so if he has some stuff that he don't like inside the story he will not post you since he considers that this will upset you ....anyway I think I know you better and that you can use all the feedback that you can get

 

 

...this ideea I've PM to mask also

 

 

About your other story .....hmmm....how old is he ? It seems that your style is already improved so that story needs a second shot .... and the ideea is ok ..... but I don't like magic with space ships .... anyway you will see that you could do better ( I only read the first pages so I still have to read it all )

 

 

....also nobody will leave his pregnant women home to die like that .....how old are you 19 ?! ...he,he that explains alot .

 

 

Well Stellar_Magic I will always be behind you with my support feedback and the rest of the stuff .....keep up the good job

[Jahled]

....Spoda....

 

 

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[Stellar_Magic]

Sorry I haven't responded lately or written another story, my computer just decided to format the user partition...I've lost everything... Except for SM...

 

In response to Cains comments...

 

Cain said

About your other story .....hmmm....how old is he ? It seems that your style is already improved so that story needs a second shot .... and the ideea is ok ..... but I don't like magic with space ships .... anyway you will see that you could do better ( I only read the first pages so I still have to read it all )

 

The first pages...that explains allot of the confusion. but...magic with space ships, well that is Star Wars. Most novelists put Star Wars in the Fantasy reason for that exact reason... the force = magic. Later on in the story I actuall allude to a scientific reason for magic.

 

Cain seemed a little put out by this:

....also nobody will leave his pregnant women home to die like that .....how old are you 19 ?! ...he,he that explains alot .

 

How old: 18

 

The woman isn't under threat...the kid is the primary character for the rest of the novel...

 

Ernst suffering from Combat exhaustion and Depression...he can't stand to see this young man sacrifice himself for him.

 

Thus far by my estimation you've met Ernst Baumer, he won't show up again till the end of the novel. The entire sequence is a clue to who one of the "Bad Guys" mentioned in the book is. You may have met his sixteen year old son and his wife, James and Crystal respectavely. You may also have read some things that establish the female lead, Mara Nellprin.

 

You've got allot of reading to do Cain.

 

[Cain]

Ok

[Stellar_Magic]

Okay just great...I actualyl could get into the server for a change

 

So here's the next episode, (It's kinda short cause I've been kinda busy)

 

Captain Picard sat thinking as the damage reports came in. He turned back to the view screen and sighed slightly to himself, “Well, it’ll take us a few a few weeks at Shipyard for everything to be back in one piece.â€

[BadSamaritan]

Two thrawns? Even better.

 

Now tell me, what would happan if thrawn were to go up against himself in a massive space battle?

[Cain]

HOOOORRAAAAAA ! Stellar_Magic is back !

[Stellar_Magic]

Rapora vs Thrawn = cool battles, don't you agree?

 

Jade Scimitar is offline and damaged again you know what that means...Mara is p**sed.

 

Just a question though, what do you think about the fight between the Rapora and Thrawn... Is Thrawn good enough or not?

 

If Thrawn went against himself...well I think the Imperial Thrawn would defect, he wouldn't dare fight his own people, but if it came to a battle...Draw, both of them would know what the other was thinking and act accordingly.

 

EDIT: Um...Cain I sent you an E-mail with a new avatar , did you recieve it?

[Cain]

With all the SWR server changes I can't acces my SWR accounts .....nope I didn't see your new avatar

 

EDIT : Nice episode I love the Ideea of a nice Thrawn

 

 

...but I don't like my Enteprise gone ..... .....How will Picard fight in this intergalactic battle now ?!

 

let me gues the Romulans the Klingos and the Federation will come now to the resque .... ?!....no

 

we have some new republic around ...not to much.

 

 

..many Imperials and the raptora .....actualy I can't make a clear line betwen the two imperial sides ......

 

 

2 Thrawns but both don't like the New Emperor ?! wich one is the clone one I don't know....

 

...and the spheres that make this distorsion and I don't have a clue about their objectives......

 

 

.....heh you excel in space battles .....still somme new ships are confusinge for the ones that never see them before >>> try adding links for pics from the web to your story

[Stellar_Magic]

Well...Thrawn's Loyalties were never really for the empire, he's loyal to the Chiss, his home worlds.

 

Which one is the clone...I'm not exactly sure the one in the Dark Force Rising series isn't a clone.

 

I've introduced a side thats been read about in some of the books but we haven't seen any warships from them yet, until now.

 

New Side: The Empire of the Hand

First Appearance: Vision of the Future by Timothy Zahn

 

Description: Grand Admiral Thrawn's personal Empire in the Unknown regions, they have never attacked the New Republic but are constantly warding off threats in the Unknown Regions, such as the Rapora and Vagaari.

 

Their Technology is a mixture of Imperial and Chiss design. Hence a ship with a similar profile to a Star Destroyer, but with both turbolasers and chiss weaponary, (Chiss weapons are always blue in coloration).

[BadSamaritan]

Im still working on my story, its gonna be a long one.

 

Basically, it involves a super star destroyer, the romulans, and the federation.

 

Ever wondered what would happan if the romulans got ahold of a SSD?

[Cain]

Im still working on my story, its gonna be a long one.

 

Basically, it involves a super star destroyer, the romulans, and the federation.

 

Ever wondered what would happan if the romulans got ahold of a SSD?

 

 

Well we look foward to your story

[Stellar_Magic]

Here we go, a running battle aboard enterprise,

 

The Jade Scimitar tumbled end over end, steam and atmosphere streaming from its rear as the Sekotan Skip dropped into escort position. Onboard Luke pulled an oxygen mask over Ben’s head as Mara finished mounting one on her own face. She tossed him a mask as the howling wind of a decompression filled her ears. Luke caught it as his ears began to hurt from the drop in pressure. With a hiss the door of the cockpit slid shut and the wind died down to a whisper. Luke shook his head to clear it as the pressure in the cabin began to return to normal.

 

With the return of air the Luke began to catch words from the main speaker, “Jade Scimitar, status report.â€

[Cain]

I can't find the TC..... ideea where it is ?

 

 

 

FOUND it ...looking at it now...I will think about it and reply next day ...I'm to slippy now

[NIIIC]

wheel good night

[Cain]

wheel good night

 

 

NIIIC I hope your strong entry in the Forums is not a temporary drop by .....I realy had a good sleep thanks !

 

 

btw did you read all the story ?

 

 

Stellar Magic your ideea is ok ...any RDB II designer can start his own project and lobby for support to other designers. Remember to add your project to the respective topic list. Also you have my example in how I created the PTESB so it is possible as long you do the hard work but I will support you with all my skills and knowhow .....and some work also ...will see how yout TC will develop. Also you have my full permision to use any pics that you see fit from PTESB in your TC.

 

 

....did you kill Worf or is my impresion ?!

[NIIIC]

wheel good night

 

 

NIIIC I hope your strong entry in the Forums is not a temporary drop by .....I realy had a good sleep thanks !

 

 

btw did you read all the story ?

 

 

Stellar Magic your ideea is ok ...any RDB II designer can start his own project and lobby for support to other designers. Remember to add your project to the respective topic list. Also you have my example in how I created the PTESB so it is possible as long you do the hard work but I will support you with all my skills and knowhow .....and some work also ...will see how yout TC will develop. Also you have my full permision to use any pics that you see fit from PTESB in your TC.

 

 

....did you kill Worf or is my impresion ?!

 

In there mater of a fact, I reed the beginning but I’m lost because I am not like Mad78, I don't know a thing about Startrek, and about star wars, I HAVEN’T read one of these books about it, so poor Mad usually hates talking about SW because he has to pass 10 min to explain everything, but he can't help it, he can't stop speaking about SW.

 

All of that to say that I don't always catch the funny thing, sorry Stellar_Magic

[Mad78]

You know it isn't your fault NIIIC

[Stellar_Magic]

Yes I killed off, a Worf...Remember we have two Thrawns, so why not two Worfs

[Sith_Mask]

I have seen some of the Borg in the second episode.....but the last episodes are more confusing ......where is the borg ?

[Stellar_Magic]

Well its complicated, the Borg will be back, eventually, but you'll be really lost if you don't read it all from the begining.